Just Because I'm Different.

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FazoliMoli123
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 2:02 am
FazoliMoli123 says... · Mon Feb 08, 2010 2:02 am
Just because im different.
You have to still care.
Just because im weird,
Doesn’t mean I cant bear,
The ridicule, and pain.
And not see the light again.

I guess your nieve
And you just cant see
The person inside, trying to break free.

I guess you don’t mind,
Its all good to me.
Just friggin walk away,
And leave me be.

For if you shun me or hate me
Screw me, or fake me.
I will never be.
Like you.
Beauty Lies Within The Beholder.

Maybe The Beholder Should Leave, And Let Me Feel Beautiful.
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Mon Feb 08, 2010 10:26 pm
emoticon220 says... · Mon Feb 08, 2010 10:26 pm
good job! i appreciate your use of punctuation. i like how you expressed the feelings of different people everywhere. (i am also weird :) )the only thing i have to say is,
Just friggin' walk away
there should be an apostrophy here.
thats it.
O thin men of Haddam,/Why do you imagine golden birds?/Do you not see how the blackbird/Walks around the feet/Of the women about you?
-Wallace Stevens
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Tue Feb 09, 2010 3:55 am
FazoliMoli123 says... · Tue Feb 09, 2010 3:55 am
thank youuu!!! :]
Beauty Lies Within The Beholder.

Maybe The Beholder Should Leave, And Let Me Feel Beautiful.
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