A Response to the Bet

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The Bet is a inquiry of one of the largest bets of your life, depending on whether there is, or isnt a god. its stated as there IS or Isnt a god, thats the question. The bet is how you live your life depending on wether there is or isnt a god, will you worship a god your whole life or not. By my personal reckoning it doesnt make sense not to belive in a god. Because there are four possibilities.
1. live with the safety that there is an afterlife and be happy but wrong, plus.
2. live with the safety that there is an afterlife and be happy but right, plus plus
3. live with the emptyness that there isnt an afterlife and be sad but wrong, plus
4. live with the emtpyness that there isnt an afterlife and be sad but right, negative
i know these thing and yet I remain doubtfull in religioun, please copy your opinion if you will.
Creedy: all youve got are your knives and your fancy karate gimmicks we have guns
V: no what you have are bullets and the hope that when you are out of bullets i wont be standing because if i am youll all be dead before youve reloaded




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Hey, it's Light_Devil here and I'll be helping with what I can. XD

Let's go!

Lord Olaf wrote:The Bet is a inquiry of one of the largest bets of your life, depending on whether there is, or isn't a God.


Fixed up a little bit in red.

It's stated as there is or isn't a God, that's the question.


Same here. Also you repeated the same thing. Accidental, or trying to prove a point? Hmm, this sentence doesn't make much sense either.

The Bet is how you live your life depending on whether there is, or isn't a God; will you worship a God your whole life or not?


Here too.

By my personal reckoning, it doesn't make sense not to belive in a God, because there are four possibilities.


And here.

1. Live with the safety that there is an afterlife and be happy, but wrong. Plus.
2. Live with the safety that there is an afterlife and be happy, but right. Plus-plus.
3. Live with the emptiness that there isn't an afterlife and be sad, but wrong. Plus.
4. Live with the emtpiness that there isn't an afterlife and be sad, but right. Negative.


I'm seeing a pattern . . .

I know these things and yet, I remain doubtful in religion. Please copy your opinion, if you will.


Overall:

You probably didn't want someone to review this. :D However, I saw it, saw all the mistakes and decided I needed to fix it up at least. Be sure to run the spellcheck before you post anything, okay? Now, I hope this helped in some way and maybe it will also help you get some replies. Also, I'd like to know why being right about no afterlife is a negative. Anyway, this is a pretty sound idea.

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Hi Olaf. This was alright. It's got a lot of potential, and I want to like this so much, but your writing style kind of killed it for me.

Your writing is very, very plain-I mean, I can't see anything special about it. For an article, you put way to emotion into it. Emotion is good, but you go a bit far and seems amateurish, like when you capitalize is and isn't.

Also, you never describe what exactly "The Bet" is. We can see the rewards, but how will we know if we are willing to accept the stakes?

However, it's not all bad! I'm sorry if I sound harsh, because it does have potential. Just use my comments and the comments Light_Devil made to revise this, and you'll have gold on your hands.

Au Revior,
Elinor

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I only wrote the list and a few sentences of my opinion, I apologize for not mentioning what the bet is, (i wrote it in a hurry) a giant mistake even though seeing as the whole thing is based around the bet. So in response, the bet is how you live your life whether you worship a god in the chances of being accepted into a heaven or being incarnated. As for too much emotion, blame the original writer not me. But thank you for the tips i can (and will) work on. :)
Creedy: all youve got are your knives and your fancy karate gimmicks we have guns
V: no what you have are bullets and the hope that when you are out of bullets i wont be standing because if i am youll all be dead before youve reloaded



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