covered in blood/gore (Death Metal)

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The final count down is now in count,
You are still killing people more and more,
Simply you are not the person who I adore,
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Since the president is now black!
The world is getting strong bit of a hack!
People like you saying that I am free!
So come on lets shoot some folks, homie Gee!
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This little change makes you think
Yes we can, I will rob a bank before you blink
So let me ask did it all really change?
Your life was always like this, I can see it from this range
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I know why you are covered in blood...
I know why your hands are red...
I know why you are covered in gore...
I know why your hands are red!
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I am sick and disgusted of what you do!
Remember the little girl?
Stop acting stupid, do not ask who!
You answer, ‘Yes, but at least I admit it...'
´At least you could something about it!´
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You raped her then you ripped her apart!
You answer, ‘Yes, but at least I admit it...’
´At least you could something about it!´
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I know why you are covered in blood...
I know why your hands are red...
I know why you are covered in gore...
I know why your hands are red!
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(Guitar solo)
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I know why you are covered in blood...
I know why your hands are red...
I know why you are covered in gore...
I know why your hands are red!
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I know why you are covered in blood, (Stretched)
I know why your hands are red, (Stretched)
I know why you are covered in gore, (Stretched)
I know why your hands are red, (Stretched)
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I know why you are covered in blood!!! (Roaring your lungs out)
I know why your hands are red!!! (Roaring your lungs out)
I know why you are covered in gore!!! (Roaring your lungs out)
I know why your hands are red!!!!(Roaring your lungs out)
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I know why it all is red!!!(Roaring your lungs out)
I know why it all is red!!!(Roaring your lungs out)
I know why it all is red!!!(Roaring your lungs out)
I know why it always will be red!!!(Roaring your lungs out)
Last edited by lordgluzman on Tue Sep 01, 2009 3:24 pm, edited 2 times in total.
Blood is red
But Heaven is blue
The Devil will fined out
And take you




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well, this is uhm well something. hahaha. i liked it, despite the fact i'm a girl. it's pretty gnar. :] i like it, a lot. it's pretty twisted.. haha.




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I wish you could tell me why you liked it. Not just say it.
Blood is red
But Heaven is blue
The Devil will fined out
And take you




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lordgluzman wrote:The final count down is now in count,

This repetition of 'count' bothers me. :)

lordgluzman wrote:Since the president is now black!
The world is getting strong bit of a hack!
People like you saying that I am free!
So come on lets shoot some folks, homie Gee!

This didn't make very much sense to me. Line one and three are okay, but two and four feel like forced rhyme. Remember, songs don't have to rhyme and they don't have to follow the same pattern through out the whole song.
And that applies to the rest of this too.

Not my favorite of yours. The topic seemed to jump around a little bit, I'm not 100% sure what it was about and I couldn't really hear this one in my head like I can some of your other ones.

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