Danny's Poem

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You're making it so hard for me to be surprised.
I can be the real me, no judgement in your eyes.
Something about you makes everything seem okay
I never have to worry about the things that I say.
There's a simple something I feel in your touch
How was I to know a simple kiss could mean so much?
Come and take my hand, baby you lift me up
Never knew that I could feel this type of love.
I'm going to make this work, this is all to real.
How can I ignore the strength of what I feel?
Life is such a rollercoaster, and you keep me in my seat
Taught me to love myself, to not admit defeat.

I don't know what it is to make me feel this way,
There are no words I know of to express what I need to say.
Total trust in my eyes, knowing you'll never leave
A promise for the first time I honestly believe.
I know this can last forever as long as we both try
I can feel it in your touch I can see it in your eyes
I belong to you, just as you to me
There's more to our love that what everyone can see
The devotion and attraction, the words we have whispered
The heat between us so hot we can stand the freezing winter.
I will never stray from your side, so long you want me here
And even if you are ever done, I'll still be standing near

You're making it so hard for me to withdraw to my shell again
I want to hide but with you, I never want to go back in
&&she's got a smirk and a "screw you" attitude
b/c good girls don't make history books




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DixielandMisfit wrote:You're making it so hard for me to be surprised.
I can be the real me, no judgement in your eyes.
Something about you makes everything seem okay
I never have to worry about the things that I say.
There's a simple something I feel in your touch
How was I to know a simple kiss could mean so much?
Come and take my hand, baby you lift me up
Never knew that I could feel this type of love.
I'm going to make this work, this is all to real. (It should be too) How can I ignore the strength of what I feel?
Life is such a rollercoaster, and you keep me in my seat (roller coaster should be a seperate word.)
Taught me to love myself, to not admit defeat.

I don't know what it is to make me feel this way,
There are no words I know of to express what I need to say.
Total trust in my eyes, knowing you'll never leave
A promise for the first time I honestly believe.
I know this can last forever as long as we both try
I can feel it in your touch, I can see it in your eyes
I belong to you, just as you to me
There's more to our love that what everyone can see (you put that, should it be then?)
The devotion and attraction, the words we have whispered
The heat between us so hot we can stand the freezing winter. (This is my favorite part, good job.)
I will never stray from your side, so long you want me here
And even if you are ever done, I'll still be standing near

You're making it so hard for me to withdraw to my shell again
I want to hide but with you, I never want to go back in


Ok, this was an amazing twist to your average love poem. I thought you did a wonderful job, especially with your phrasing. =]

So keep writing.

_Writing for love is a passion_
No where to run...baby let's hide. Take her in your arms on a chilling winter's night. Watch the stars twinkle and glisten. Know that you've found the one person that will listen. ~*(ME)*~



Of those who say nothing, few are silent.
— Thomas Neill