Alex the Queen; title in process

Prologue:

Some people just never find out how special they are until they are thrust upon whatever it is. I just happen to be one of those people.
Just imagine. If you lived your whole life believing you are just an ordinary kid and nothing extraordinary will come your way when suddenly, what you find out may not just change the world, but also yourself.

I love it! It's interesting and it makes me want to read more, which is what a prologue must do. It was very very short, so there is not much to critique, but I'd love it if you'd post more! Pm me when you do!
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ofir

Hi,
Good job so far, keep writing. I found a missing letter;

If you lived you whole life believing you are just an ordinary kid

It should be; "If you lived your whole life"...

Since it's so short I can't help you much, but keep at it! In the future I'd suggest posting longer pieces, which would give people more to review and help you out with.

~Tayla

Hi,
Great prologue! I really enjoyed it, just keep writing so we don't all die of anticipation. Please keep me posted on when you write more.
Eagerly waiting
~Zanna

P.S. You should sign my guest book and I'd love it if you'd review my stuff too!

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Hey there! Welcome to YWS!

Well, this was too terribly short, there's practically nothing to review. But. I like it.

Just imagine. Think.

This sounds awkward. Choose one or the other!

If you lived your whole life believing you are just an ordinary kid and nothing extraordinary will come your way when suddenly, what you find out may not just change the world, but also yourself.

This was too long a sentence; so long it doesn't flow well. Break it up into shorter sentences.


To me, it sounds too vague and a little cliche. Maybe if you could introduce something specific, it would be better. Keep writing!