The last time...

Stepping into the light,
out of the dark.
I see the door knob.
I reach out, and grasp it.

It's such a feeling i have inside,
it's like butterflies, only a little bit different.
The kind of feeling where you can do anything.
I'm untouchable.

I was here only hours ago,
but everything's changed now.
I've changed.
Everything's different, was it me that did this?

They said it wasn't my fault.
They say it was an accident.
"He just kept on hitting me, he wouldn't stop.." I said.
They beleived, I was freed.

And now I'm here.
I just wanted to see where I did it.
Is the blood still on the floor.
Did they already carry his body away?

I creep in to his old, musty bedroom.
And all these memories flood my mind.
I push them out, I just can't take it.
I feel my damp tears linger on my cheeks, I ignore them.

I'm in, I did it.
I sense his presence.
But I know he's gone, for good.
And for the first time all night, I smile.

I replay the scene in my head.
I was crying beside my mom on the floor.
She was gone, I knew it.
And then I hit him with the wrench I brought with me.

I now embrace my tears.
I can't do anything for my mother,
but I can do something for me.
And then I walk out, and close the door behind me.. forever.

This is amazing! It makes what has happened really clear without actually narrating the scene. I feel bad just putting good comments, but I can't really think of much you could improve on! Perhaps put the 'forever' (the last one) on its own separate line, just to make the reader take more of a break before seeing it, but otherwise it's really good, telling the audience just enough to keep them interested, but not too much, and the variety of the language and structure. I can't think of much more to say, but it really is terrific!

Hi. Welcome to YWS!

You have some good lines here. I really like;
""He just kept on hitting me, he wouldn't stop.." I said.

They beleived, I was freed."
The dialogue is very effective, and I love the internal rhyme in the latter line. Just a tip, click the "check spelling" button (just over the box into which you type) before you submit a post; it will catch typos like "beleived".

I also really like;
"And then I hit him with the wrench I brought with me." It's shocking and powerful.

I'd change the "darkness, light" bit at the start, as it's cliche, and also lines such as "can't take it." I'd go through this with a pen and cross out every line that sounds like something you've heard before, then close your eyes and focus on your character and your scene and really try to see it.

I think the last seven stanzas are more effective than the two which come before them, which are a bit vague, and focus too much on the speaker's thoughts. I'd try looking instead at the speaker's actions and surroundings. Where is she? What is she looking at? How is she physically showing that she feels nervous and powerful?

This ends effectively. You use dialogue well, so I'd consider adding a little more of it.

It could also be interesting to try this as a short story. In some ways this reads more like prose than poetry, and I think that pursuing it in prose would help you discover little visual details which you could add to the poem.

I hope this helps. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions.

Jas

thank yall soo much, i dont really have time to edit it right now, but i will tommorow

thanks
elena.