It's Written In The Rain

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It's Written In The Rain


The cloud covered sky swallows the night.
I see your face and you're holding me tight.
The touch of your hand in mine,
That's when I know, we'll be fine.
The smile on your face lights up the dark
It feels like something has begun to spark
It's written in the rain.

We don't have to go anywhere just yet
I wanna tell you that I'll never forget
The day I met you was the day,
I turned to you and wanted to say,
"You mean something to me
and with you is where I wanna be."
It's written in the rain.

Walking with you down this street,
Every step marching to our hearts' beat.
Time could never rob us of who we are.
In this big, black sky, we're one star.
I'm so glad that I've found you.
I hope you will say you feel that way too.
It's written in the rain.

The rain so simple like your tender kiss.
Could "us" be our one true bliss?
Talking as the time seems to fade away.
There's so much that I'm dying to say.
Hold my hand and promise to never let go.
Put your arms around me; we'll dance slow.
Written in the rain, it's you and me.

-thevoiceinside
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Rhyming:
I'm not saying I'm a rhyming wizard or anything (cause I'm really not :)) but this AABBCCD every stanza gets kind of old. Try mixing up the rhyme a little. It doesn't all have to rhyme to sound good.
Like, I still think it sounds fine if you take out the 'tight' in the second line.
So it would be: The cloud covered sky swallows the night.
I see your face and you're holding me.
Exact same message, it still has rhythm, just no rhyme.

Rhythm:
It has nice rhythm, but I found it hard to think of a melody as I went along. I couldn't hear this song it my head, it read as more of a poem to me.
Maybe the song plays in your head really well, I don't know :)

Overall:
Overall, I thought it was a good concept. You used good language and got the message across well. So nice job :)

-Carly
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The song is really good and yeah as Carly said try to mix up the rhyme scheme a little bit (i think it can make the song better). I am not saying its not good. It is really very good. But, as you know everything is not perfect. The song has a nice rhythm to it, which is really good. Everyone can create a different beat in their head when they read the song, which is really nice. Overall, I thought the song is really very good.

- Anshita



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