Contradicting Forces

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I’m so cocked,
Crooked.
I’m so torn,
Tainted.
I’m so deadly,
Dreadful,
Disgusting.

I walk so gangly,
Gaunt.
I smile so faint,
Failure.
I live so pierced,
Painstakingly,
Pieced.

You’re so calm,
Consummate.
You’re so tall,
Taking.
You’re so desirable,
Delicate,
Datable.

You walk so graceful,
Guiltless.
You smile so finely,
Figuratively.
You live so perfect,
Peacefully,
Placed.

We’re so opposite,
Other.
We’re so truth,
Talking.
We’re so different,
Discrepant,
Dissimilar.

We don’t belong.
-SaraRose




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wow! i just love it! especially this stanza:

You walk so graceful,

Guiltless.

You smile so finely,

Figuratively.

You live so perfect,

Peacefully,

Placed.



opinionated with a tinge of sarcasm... although it makes more sense to me if "Peacefully placed" was just one line... :]
"Love is the black of cliches" ~bailecielo'09~




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on second thought, forget my suggestion... :] it'll totally ruin the rest of it :] LOVE it! :]
"Love is the black of cliches" ~bailecielo'09~




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I really love the poem.

Short concise lines, it doesn't always have to be long to be good.

I like the last stanza the most.


"We’re so opposite,

Other.

We’re so truth,

Talking.

We’re so different,

Discrepant,

Dissimilar."


Kudos to you (Y) Keep writing!
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