Do you believe in me?: Prelude /P

Your character is very arrongant, not that you haven't heard that already. But I liked him being that way. In stories there is always someone you want to hate. And it being the main intrested in. He feels as though he is the only real person, comparing to all the others that are fake to him.

Very well written.

x. Maria.

I haven't reviewed in a long time but your title caught my attention right away so I decided I should start reviewing again. Hopefully you don't disappoint

He managed out of the building like a goomba, but he was gone.

This is awkwardly worded. Maybe try: He managed to get out of his chair and from the building like a goomba, but he was - thank god - gone. or something like that.

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I greatly enjoy your ending. It made this story all the more worth reading it (and no, you did not disappoint). Your writing had a freshness to it that made it more than just another love story.

I can't really praise it more than that; otherwise, you'll be stuck with me going on and on about how I liked it

Though I wasn't much help, I wish you the best of luck with this piece.