Love You Forever

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I enjoyed this :D

The last stanza is most powerful!

Beautiful. Although, it can be improved. I agree on what Hassan said by expressing complex feelings with simple words. I would recommend you look this over, and modify it.

If anything, I find this to be a beautiful first draft.

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So, please, oh please, we beg, we pray, go throw your TV set away, and in its place you can install a lovely bookcase on the wall.
— Roald Dahl