Paint

My Life is a canvas
Your Love is my paint

Let your brush stroke me
I'm open and blank

Every time you say"I Love You"
It's Paints a little More

I love the way it feels
The feeling submurges me

I long for those days
Those Beautiful Days

The Days you say "I Love You"
Those Days I love so much

Awww, I loved it=). It was really cute and colorful. While I was reading it, I pictured a heart slowly being painted and by the end it was complete. Basically, awesome imagery. Ahhh, you definitely need to write more poetry. Good luck! The best kind of poetry is one that hits the heart and for me your poetry did that. Good job!

My Life is a canvas

Your Love is my paint


Let your brush stroke me

I'm open and blank


Every time you say"I Love You"

It's Paints a little More


I love the way it feels

The feeling submurges me


I long for those days

Those Beautiful Days


The Days you say "I Love You"

Those Days I love so much

Okay, first off you need some punctuation. There are no commas or periods where they are needed. Your first three stanzas are beautiful. But, I think that more should be added, and that you should omit the last stanza. In the poem it has been mentioned how you like it when he says I Love You. Its a sweet little poem. But as I have said before, you need some added to it. It would be so much better. So good luck, and keep writing.

oooh... I loved it, especially the parts with the canvas similies ( I paint ^^) . It really gave me the feeling of happy love. At the end it slowed down a little, but I don't feel that it messed the poem up... keep writing, its so easy reviewing your poems!^^

KBaby211 wrote:
(Hey there KBaby! I'm June and I'm to be your reviewer today. I liked this poem; it was short, sweet, and not too cliche. I think it just lacked a bit of punctuation. Here are my nitpicks, suggestions, and comments; )

My Life is a canvas(; )
Your Love is my paint(.)

I stuck some punctuation in there . I would suggest making the "L" in love lowercase.

Let your brush stroke me(; )
I'm open and blank(.)

Every time you say"I Love You"(,)
It's Paints a little More(.)

Keep your "p" in paints lowercase.

I love the way it feels(; )
The feeling submurges me(.)

"submurges" should be spelled, "submerges"

I long for those days(; )
Those Beautiful Days (,)

The repetition of "Those" doesn't suit very well here... perhaps change one to "the".

The Days you say "I Love You"(; )
Those Days I love so much(.)

keep you "D's" in "day" lowercase.

I liked it; it was simple, short and sweet. It could use a bit of polishing, but I think it was pretty good.


Keep writing!

xxJune

Hope I wasn't too harsh!