This is my friend's poem but he does not believe me when I say he is a good poet, so if you could help me out and tell me what you think, that would be awesome.
Rain pores from the clouds in the sky,
Like tears falling from my eyes.
Every night I would wish for something more.
Something there, and there for sure.
I got my wish, in the form of a girl,
A beautiful girl, made for me in this world.
But now she lies there, on the cold, hard street.
It seeming to engulf her with the night.
That night i lost my world.
My love.
My light.
" of Molly's who wrote this. I thought it was good, but to hear people I don't know say it is is awesome! Any way to I understand what your saying about description, but what I was trying to do is spark imagination. Did they break up? Did she die? Was she hit by a car? It was meant to make you think about what happened. As for the quote that confused you about it wasn't to say the girl was his world it was to say that he felt alone and that he had nothing and no one that would always be there. People lose friends and he felt as though nothing in his life was always going to be there. Then he met a girl who loved him and he felt that someone would always be there for him now. That's when something happens. It's not clear what happens, but it's not supposed to be. It's supposed to spark your imagination. Oh and I'm a guy and my name is Jacob lol.
