Artist on strings

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You call me an artist
BUT WHAT IF I LIKE TO WRITE?
you call me a karate kid
BUT WHAT IF I PASS UP A FIGHT?
AM I ONLY A PUPPET TO FUFILL YOUR ENJOYMENT?
am I only an artist on strings
encourage me, build me up then you clip my wings?
Tell me Tell me I implore! who is the real puppeteer in this game of war?




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It was pretty funny...

I wouldn't do the whole capital letter thing you were doing though. If you wanna do something that'll stick out next time, it'd be better to italicise it, I believe.

It's just easier on the eyes.

Otherwise this was fine.
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Interesting poem. I found it rather funny, but also a tad bit sad.

I get on to people a lot for this, but you don't have a stable rhyming pattern. Lines 2 and 4 rhyme, so that is what I was expecting for the rest of the poem, but you changed it. Then lines 6 and 7 rhymed. Do you see what I mean?

I think you should have split up the last line, since it's two sentences.

Tell me Tell me I implore!

Comma between the two "tell me"s, and if you want to emphasize the second "tell me" I would italicise it instead of capitalizing.

All in all, nice poem.

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Awesome job, I love the rebellious feel to it, like you would be shouting it at a rally. It holds a good point as well. If you elaborated on this I could definitely see it becoming a song or rap. The caps don't bother me too much, but they do give you the impression of shouting. If that was what you were aiming for then I think it should be fine. A in the last stanza would be helpfull, however.
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