Bitter Sweet- Chapter Four

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eviscerate your fragile frame
spill it out in ragged form
a thousand different versions of yourself.




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i think its a cute chapter.

Yes, this boy belonged in the second grade

haha, what boy doesnt?


But one day he’ll, be wrinklier and wiser than I.”

i dont think you need the comma after "he'll"


I said with an incredulously.

you might want to say something like, "I said incredulously"
or maybe "I said with an incredulous voice" or something else.
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Holly-
This chapter seemed a little odd to me. Maybe because it was too short, but it was cute for Mae's birthday.
I want to know what's going on with Mae's dreams, her mom, and the kids at school. And what happened to Wiley? Her was there for a second and now gone.
Sorry, if this didn't seem much of a review. But you really have me intrigued with this sorry. It's so captivating.
-Merry
Mary had a little lamb. Little lamb. Little lamb!

Ugh!! I really hate my name. >.<



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