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Suicide Kills Us All

JFW1415 · 2008-06-11T02:17:46Z

Rated for swears, suicide, and teenage boy's thoughts. :) This is my new story, Suicide Kills Us All . (Which is a working title.) It's kind of strange. Connor kills himself, and it's kind of people's reactions...eh, you need to read it. Like, you *need* to. You *want* to. :) Things to look out for: - Character development! It's the whole point I wrote this, and I *need* to develop different voices. - The therapist part . *Very* bad. (So stick it out - it does get better! In my opinion, at least.) - Title suggestions. - If you needed more hints/more subtle ones. - Anything else! Thanks so much! PM me if you'd ever like a critique in return. :) Oh, and this is 31 words shy of 5k, but I figured it would be all right. Close enough, and such a shame to cut up. :) ~JFW1415 Edit: It was so late when I posted this that I forgot to give credit where credit was due! Sam: For writing 'Parking Lot Sparrows,' which inspired me to write this. Suzanne: For pointing me to Sam's story and telling me that I need to write more like that. :) Cal: For making the Table of Doom (Historic.) I kind of stole the chart, took out many words, added one, and wrote. Then I ditched the words. :) Thanks you guys! You're all freakin' amazing. (As are all those who critique!) (Note to self: check out The Laramie Project.) Currently being edited.

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Sun Jul 20, 2008 5:41 pm

JFW1415 says... · Sun Jul 20, 2008 5:41 pm

*dies*

I just realized I haven't said thank you!!!

So. I am kissing your feet. I am worshiping the ground you walk on. I am... in love with you. All of you.

I owe you guys immensely. Go to Will Critique For Food, and leave me stuff. You better.

If not, I'll probably just lurk around in your portfolio anyways.

I know this needs work, and thanks to you guys, I know what to do! I won't edit this for a while - I don't have the patience right now - but I will. Your critiques will not be in vain.

*Throws flowers* I love you all more than life itself.

~JFW1415

You can cut all the flowers, but you cannot stop Spring from coming.
— Pablo Neruda

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