Lies

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For a season I live by the lie we call love—
A temporary insanity I held onto
Yet I knew nothing would last forever.
I don’t have time to waste time on it anymore.
My guitar is more important.

I wore a wooden cross on my *right* earring
Hoping it would bring me luck—or something like that.
Though objects can change nothing

I took my guitar with me everywhere.
Playing as often as I took a breath.
Getting some attention might do me some justice.
But I stopped when I learned
Everyone was walking away

And I lie to everyone
Telling them everything is wrong.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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I've long suspected guitarists are liars...
"If I have not seen as far as others, it is because giants were standing on my shoulders." -Hal Abelson




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That was a very helpful comment, Brad.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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It's interesting, but you don't describe your story enough. No, I don't mean using pretentious words *shudders* but I read this poem and I wonder, "Huh?" Now, of course, this may be because I'm a little bit obtuse when it comes down to poetry, but it seems l9ike you can expand more on this poem and make it sound better.
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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Yeah. I realized that after I wrote it. But I don't know where or what to add! Agh! I'm so pitiful.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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Oh don't say that. At least you can write poems...when it comes to poetry, I suck.
Quarrels would not last long if the fault were only on one side.
--La Rochedoucauld

"An unexamined life is not worth living..."
---Socraties



Love is the one thing we're capable of perceiving that transcends dimensions of time and space.
— Dr. Amelia Brand, Interstellar