Not quite anything at all

Walking in a circular motion,
not quite pacing,
not quite anything at all.

Walking in a circular motion,
watching the same images pass by,
each one growing a little different every time.

Not quite pacing,
not in any certain way,
just passing time away.

Not quite anything at all,
just like a note left in the bathroom stall,
just like you've seen it all.

I like the idea, but the wording could use a little work (but I don't get imagery so it might just do as well to stay like it is).

Anyways I think this is very powerful... it makes me think of how much time is actually wasted... and that's a good thing because wasted time is bad. =]

This was very confusing, in a really good way. It is meant to be that way, a confusing poem!

I really liked how you used the repition, making it have a wandering and confusing affect!

Nice job!

Paw

Hey,
I like your poem. It has a good rhythm and I know what you're going for.

I got a little off when you repeated "Walking in a circular motion." in the second verse, but you might have done that on purpose.

It's very, I want to say random but it isn't exactly that, broad? I mean that it brings lots of things together that fit and don't exactly match. It's good but wording is the best thing to think about.

Nice work. ^ ^

Thanks,
Mikaela (Cally)