Very nice subject, and by editing this just a little bit you could have a great poem! I found one confusing part in the third stanza;
"Your warmth makes me aware."
Aware of what? I think you should explain it more or else, change the word. It seems you wrote "aware" just because it rhymes with "hair". It's a nice thought, that awareness, but we don't know what are you aware of. So maybe edit a little?
The flow could be better, too, especially in the second stanza.
Overall: Cute poem, nice subject, needs a bit editing perhaps. (as most of the poems)
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Kindly,
Demeter
"Your jokes are scarier than your earrings." -Twit
"14. Pretend like you would want him even if he wasn't a prince. (Yeah, right.)" -How to Make a Guy Like You - Disney Princess Style
It is to be fair unique but still you use a lot of cliches which weaken it. Love poems generally not a good idea until you can approach it with something new or rare to the table. I'm sorry to say this didn't seem all that great.
Overall: Read more poetry, it'll help.
Good luck
VSN
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
We are the ink, we are the quill.
[The Ink And The Quill (Be Afraid) - Anti-Flag]
This is quite simple, but one thing I think would make this infinitely better, is to take off the tags. i.e. "Sight, Sound, Touch, Smell, Taste." Then see if they can stand on their own and if the reader can identify which stanza belongs to each sense. But this does need some work. Use everyone else's suggestions. I'd say the same thing. Keep wiritng!
