Your Branches Are Mine

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Your Branches Are Mine

Our bare-bodied tree limbs,
tangled and knotted together
with leaves of our poetry,
around us like discarded paper skirts.
The satin sheets
with troubled hills, up and down,
reflecting our lives,
our only basis in life-
an eternal expanse in all directions.

The color is drained and gone,
leaving the widest range
of technicolor greys.
Sound is the only invasion,
giving us our music
and the song of words and posey
to bridge our thoughts.

Our lives are now braided,
together in this eternal spin
leaving only a trail of leaves
floating on a breeze of faint music.




If you don't know, the definition of posey is poetry. I just liked using that better than repeating the words poetry which was used in the first stanza. That is all. Hope you enjoyed it. ;)
~Yoyo 8)
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Very nice. I enjoyed this. It's really metaphorical, which is pretty cool.

The color is drained and gone,
leaving the widest range
of technicolor greys.
Sound is the only invasion,
giving us our music
and the song of words and posey
to bridge our thoughts.


My favorite stanza. I love the color description.

The satin sheets
with troubled hills, up and down,
reflecting our lives,
our only basis in life-
an eternal expanse in all directions.


I don't really understand this part. Maybe it's just me.

Nice poem, though. Good luck with your writing! :D

~Jamie
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Eh, nothing to crit. I adore this! So beautiful!




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Yes, I enjoyed this! It has good imagery.
I have nothing else to say, except:
Keep up the good work! :)
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Hey yoyo:D
"Half the time the poem writes me." ~Meshugenah



i think once every new ywser realizes they can manifest themselves into the quote gen by making a post about the quote gen, they make a very inconspicuous post about the quote gen, but deep in their hearts, they know they’ll see that post at the bottom of the page one day. (yeah, i see you mods. you brought this upon us)
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