Lookin Back On My Life, I Gotta Ask, Were My Choices Right? The Decisions Too. If I Could Go Back, Change It All, You Think I Should? I Guess I Would. But Since I Can't I Gotta Accept, My Mistakes I've Made And Just Move On, Live The Life That I Am In.
"Yes I'm Pretty, Not Beautiful. I Sin, I'm not a Devil. I'm Nice, I'm not an Angel." I Think You Know Who Said This One.
Um... this wasn't really my kind of poem. Especially since it's written the way it is. You capitialized things that you really didn't need to. If you read it like I did it sort of would have sounded somewhat like a cheer.
I wasn't sure how to crit this...
Our happiness here is all vain glory,
This false world is but transitory,
The flesh is weak, the Fiend is slee
Timor mortis conturbat me.
--William Dunbar
I think when you wrote the poem, your formatting didn't come the way you intended it to look like. ^^ Perhaps you can edit it so it looks like you originally intended it to be?
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
Yeah same as above, your format is a tad strange. Ummm... I have to admit I didn't really like this poem but maybe it's just me. It's very clichéd. Maybe you could perhaps express your ideas a little more originally?
"Jesus was the first suicide bomber" - Richard Flanagan
