This is a nice poem but to tell you the truth, it seemed plain. My suggestion would be to add some metaphors, add some more poetic words. This is a nice poem, you don't have to rewrite the whole poem, just add a little more how should I put this? spice? I hope that my suggestion will help! Keep on writing!
i agree with the comment about shivers. Its very cliche at this point. However, for the rest of the poem is well written i love how you bring it to the table. I can relate too so i enjoyed reading. thank you.
Got a good book and got all in it, tried a little yoga for a minute, still it won't let go..... *from here its always peace, and much love to you*
I liked it, but it was sooooo corny. I heard a million of these kind of poems in my lifetime. If you really had gave it some thought, it would have been a winner. Good luck and hope to read some more.
Cheat your landlord if you can and must, but do not try to shortchange the Muse. It cannot be done. You can’t fake quality any more than you can fake a good meal. — William S. Burroughs
