The Truth About Truth

Truth about Truth
What good is the truth,
When wind howls against the window?
What good is reality,
when lightning strikes in the distance?
In the middle of the night,
can you curl up with the truth?
Can the cold face of reality,
comfort your soul?
When you want to escape,
to be free of all limitations,
can pureblood honesty
satisfy it?
Truth lacks the warm comfort
that we crave, the comfort of a lie.
For that is what a story is;
A lie.
Truth is cold, unforgiving, harsh.
It is made of the things we fear,
and memories we'd rather
forget.
No one wants to
wake up to the truth,
We want to remain bundled in a lie forever,
But at some point in time,
we must accept
the truth.

I wrote this yesterday, its not too good, but i like the idea, so how can I make it better, once again, be brutal. Thanks!

You're right when you say it's not your best, but the concept is worth saving. I'd personally cut out most - if not all - of the rhetorical questions in there. You go on to answer them anyway, so why bother? Focus more on the latter half (from, say, "truth lacks the raw comfort..." onwards) and expand on or strengthen that a bit. Minimize repetitive lines such as "For that is what a story is;/A lie./Truth is cold, unforgiving, harsh." because there's no point in saying what you've alread said, and replace these bits with something with more depth. One possible way to do this would be to give the reader something specific to work with - e.g. Truth lacks the warm comfort/that we crave, the comfort of a lie./I loved you for that, the way/you never told me anything/I didn't want to hear. Or whatever. Basically, give us some context. A poem without some kind of background seldom engages the emotions, if you know what I mean.

Good luck with the editing!

Cheers,
~bubbles

I understand and agree with bubbles on the background context. This is very nice, with some great potential, but it would be even better with something that your readers can refer to. =) I loved this, regardless. Nice work!!

~*Sydney*~

ur right, what is truth?......