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I know its not normal to submit the prolouge after the first chapter but i felt that it helps you get to know the characters better.
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"They grow up so fast don't they, it seemed as if she was just born and he was in dippers." said Mrs. Hommes.The captain shook his head and headed inside where he could think.


Now you see Brian and Autumn have lived across the street from each other all their lives and their parents were best friends, so they have often been put together. In conclusion they have been the best of friends. Autumn in time will make the vacant building a dance studio that one day she will be the teacher in. Brian will play football, starting quarterback and have the highest IQ in his grade. 'The Captain' James Hommes served in the navy for thirty years, he teaches as a professor in the Navy field.


Another words he teaches college students
about being out at sea, and gets transferred a lot, normally close. Jill Hommes was a waitress at a local diner for twenty years before she met James. Dylan West was a football player in high school but know is a carpenter for a local company. Destiny West is a doctor at the family practice in the town of, Pinemill Virgina. In three years when Brian is fourteen she will have a little girl named Jenny.


Now I shall tell you some more personal things about our main characters, Brian and Autumn. Brian loves to play the guitar and looks forward to every morning getting up early to.. well you'll find out soon enough.

Autumn sings, and sings beautifully. Though she can't sing in front of crowds very well. Brian loves and would do anything for his little sister. Autumn's real name is Sarah and only is called Autumn by her closest friends, and her parents.

Brian is smart and is a Jock, he can also draw but hates math and can't spell.

Autumn got her nickname from her grandfather because she had loved to jump in piles of leaves that he made for her, he said that if she was Autumn she could take that every where with her. She is smart and runs on the schools track team and can't draw or play any instrument for her life(yet).


This my readers is where our journey begins for some and ends for others. I will tell you right know if you don't want to hear my rambling on please skip to the first chapter, but if you want to here my opinion keep reading. I hope to accomplish something by writing this, i hope for all people who read this to walk away with something. I am doing the best I can, and so is Autumn.


Autumn is working two shifts on the weekends and one shift everyday after school. Like Autumn I am hoping and believing for something more for my self and by doing this I hope I can give back to the world that has already given me a lot. To Autumn and Brian, may they leave something with all of you who read this book.
LOVEISLIKEWAR
E A S Y TO BEGIN
H A R D TO END
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Hey Rory Lewis.

Nice to meet you and welcome to YWS.

Ok well i started reading this, i dont mean to be such a put down, but i have to say, i really couldn't go on. I mean i didn't get a single thing you wrote. It all seems like a big jumbled up mess and words are either spelled wrong or missed out.

I think you should've read it again before you posted it.
Plz remember to do that everytime you post something. its easier for us and even for you for then you wont have as many mistakes you need to go fix later one by one.

If you edit it, i'll read it again, but really, you really really really need to check your work before you submit. There are other things which i want you to fix but before you even get to that, plz re-read your work.

Don't lose your motivation!!

pm me if you need anything!!!

~~chayonz
h a y o n :)

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