Seasons

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Cold...
Warn...
Chilly...
Hot...

Explains the seasons well enough, rigth?
Or does it?
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Not quite sure why you put this in. . . . ^^" I mean, it makes no sense. . . Anyways, you made a few mistakes ^^ below:

"Cold.../Warn ------------ I think you mean "warm"? -----------.../Chilly.../Hot..."

"Explains the seasons well enough, rigth -------- "right" -----------?/Or does it?

I think maybe this piece could go in your blog or something. . . It's not really a poem. . . Anyways! I hope that helped!

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These words are few of many that can describe the seasons. Play around with the thesaurus and try to make interesting metaphors and stuff.
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It depends on how vague you're trying to be. In some instances it's better to use the months outright, and even specific dates and times can be effective as well.
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Cold...
Warn...
Chilly...
Hot...

Explains the seasons well enough, rigth?
Or does it?


I personally don't see any connection to the seasons here. I am assuming Warn is supposed to be WARM. This could also be a drink, a food, body temperature ect.
It definately needs some time, as it looks like you posted something just to post.

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Erm, I don't exactly know what this is, but I have a feeling that you just posted it to get the points. Just an assumption. ;)
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Use the effects of the seasons, you could go with harvest or rainy season. Some people like to use specific flowers or blooming periods to give a hint at what season it is. If you go past a farm, what do you see? Do you see fields or corn ripe for the picking? Do you see tomatoes and cucumbers? Or perhaps pumpkins? Squash or potatoes?

If you go across a field of wildflowers, do you see buttercups, tiger lilies or roses? Sunflowers or pomegranates? Do the bees fly through the air peacefully or are they easily angered? Are birds nesting or are they feeding their newborns? Perhaps the birds have already left the nest?

Have the leaves changed color? Did they fall already? Does the chilly wind blow snow across the streets in the barren dead of winter? Or just maybe the winter is really indiscernible and never dips below a certain temperature? A lack of seasons close to the equator could also be described as a never-ending summer.



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