Letters from the Gods

4 posts
User avatar
Gender Female
Points 890
Reviews 103
I.

This is my letter to the world:
Why are you so cold?
I stand in the rain outside your door
Why don’t you let me come in?
Are you frightened, my dear ones, of me?
Are you scared I offer too much,
And ask so little?
Waiting for a catch.
But, lo, you know the catch!
You know.
Maybe I seek you.
You, oh winter of discontent
With barren trees in you that have long since been stripped of fruit.
I knock at the door softly, but you dare not answer,
To feel warm again, I thought that was what you wanted.
But I can only offer,
You have to reach out and take it.
Are you that afraid of the truth?

II.

And to have such gifts,
You expect to give some great deal,
But I only ask of you this;
Let me in.
Let me fill this dark world with your light,
Not mine.
I am only the paper on which to strike,
Where you are the match.
The fertile soil,
Where you are the seed.
You are as ready for me as mankind can be,
And yet here I stand,
Outside your door,
And I only knock softly.
Can you hear me?
Will you stop screaming and listen?

III.

Resign? Me? Never!
I have way too much fun
Doing what I do.
Maybe once in a great while I am defined
As “evil”,
But where did that word come from,
If not from you,
Or a brother
Those that break down your door,
And tear down your defenses.
You are just frightened of me,
The real me,
And I understand!
If I didn’t, I wouldn’t be me,
Now, would I?
And you do know me,
You know me.
And of course,
Of course,
I know you.

IV.

Your life is
Changing and you
Don’t know why,
The world is
Screaming so
You cry, cry,
Cry.

V.

There is a time in life,
That you wonder;
Wonder what it is going to be like,
When you die.
All I know of this,
Is the best,
And the worst,
I can ever give you.
I will show you the world!
With me,
And without me.
You will then see in all finality,
What could have been.
I will show you your box full of treasures,
And when you wonder why you never had them,
You’ll read the answer
In my eyes.

You had only to ask.


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Wrote this as a drawing, actually. In my sketchbook. A spray painted wall, a restaurant napkin, a fortune from a fortune cookie, a 'to do' list... all conglomerated together to make this little diddy here. If I had a scanner, I would scan it and show you, but I don't. Tough luck.

-Tessitore-
I'm not even angry... I'm being so sincere right now.
Even though you broke my heart.
And killed me... And tore me to pieces.
And threw every piece into a fire.
-"Still Alive"- GLaDOS




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 9692
Reviews 3900
Oooooo.... I liked this stanza:

IV.

Your life is
Changing and you
Don’t know why,
The world is
Screaming so
You cry, cry,
Cry.

And I don't even know why. But it's awesome!

Um... I'll probably give this a more thorough critique later. But there's some really nice stuff in there! And I wish I could see the sketch. :)
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

Moth and Myth <- My comic! :D




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 7241
Reviews 721
Wow.

I'm not an expert on poetry, but even I can tell that this is a true gem.

I wish I could see your sketch, but even without seeing it I can imagine it.

My only criticism is that I got a little confused about who "you" is. From the first stanza, I thought it was the world... but then this line in the last stanza "I will show you the world!" confused me. So maybe clarify that a little bit?

You are a truly talented writer! Keep it up and keep posting your stuff on here!!

~Azila~




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 890
Reviews 19
Squeeee ^^
This is so moving and deep!!

Let me in.
Let me fill this dark world with your light,
Not mine.


Thats the best part I figure.

Much <3,
P.
NOOO!
THEYRE ALL GONNA LAUGH AT YOU!
Bffl if you readTHIS



As my artist’s statement explains, my work is utterly incomprehensible and is therefore full of deep significance.
— Calvin