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Diamond Banner • Young Writers Society

Diamond Banner

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Here I turn to fantasy,
For I have no want for reality,
Keep them well,
These dreams of hell,
And heaven and what comes after,
These are merely lies,
And empty sighs,
Of lives that found no laughter.

Here I turn to fantasy,
At the crossroads of silk,
Of the fork that divides,
My dreams from my reason.
I am the lost standard,
I am the Diamond Banner.

The burden I carry, flutters in the gust,
The road that i take, I take for I must.
The Diamond in the sky, it flutters nigh and nigh,
But I am the lost banner boy,
I am the defeated king,
My victory is a fall of a thousand comets,
My victory is not more than disaster.

I rule from a defeated kingdom,
I rule with quenching fire.
Do not stare at the banner, child,
That inspired a hundred legions,
It is no more my proud jewel,

I am the Diamond Banner,
A dreaming king of old,
Go forth for the new order,
And be a warrior bold,
Leave the empty throne behind,
Leave it all to ruin,
Let the cycles cleanse the blind,
Let the time come anew,
Then the Banner shall fly again,
With all the legions behind.
Last edited by Palantalid on Mon Dec 24, 2007 7:33 am, edited 1 time in total.
What syllable are you seeking,
Vocalissimus,
In the distances of sleep?
Speak it.
—Wallace Stevens, “To the Roaring Wind”




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Good job. The poem was well written and gave a clear sense of the king's defeat.




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wow, this is very good. i could not see anything wrong with it.
excellent discriptions.
you did a great job discribing the kings defeat.
i really enjoyed reading this.
you are very good.

kim




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I thought this was brilliant! When I was reading it it sounded so... deep and serene. Good descriptions and use of words, really captivating. I really liked the whole poem. Awsome job.

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~*~It's Not Faith If You Use Your Eyes ~*~
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Dang! That was really good. I love your writing. Consider me a fan! :)

Anyway, I love this poem. Everything just... fits. I wish I could do that (cuz, try as I might, my poetry is, well, not very good). But your poetry is awsome!

Keep it up!

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See the world. It's more fantastic than any dream made or paid for in factories. Ask for no guarantees, ask for no security.
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