A Ciquain called Autumn.

Autumn,
Runny noses,
Runny, wet, dribbling,
Dripping down your face.
First frost.

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Cinquains are only suposed to be 5 lines long and i think i'm going to make them as desripive as i possibly can. I hope you liked it because when i was writting it it did make me laugh! I will be posting more, so please look out for the title of: 'A Cinquain called . . . . . . . ' [Whatever i call them in the end.]
Please leave a reply if you would like to comment on it and possibly give me some tips ect..

Cinquain! Interesting. I've learnt something new in poetry today.

Runny noses,
Runny, etc.

"Runny" doesn't seem nice as a repetition here. If you want to make an anaphora here you have to somehow make it flow to another meaning rather than letting it stand on its own.

Dripping down your face.

I can't get this line. What is dripping? Rain?

Cinquains are short so I can't critique much. Hope I've been helpful!

I like it. I'm not good with poetry, so obviously I'm not able to give you any tips or anything, so I'll just say that I liked it

I'm not sure I like it, because imagining someones runny noise nastiness dribbling down their face is gross... XD ew. It also isn't how I imagine autumn. But that's all opinions. ^_^ For a cinquain it is good. The last line didn't seem to fit with the rest of the theme of the poem, though, so you might want to think on that.

Jess,

I think you could make this longer, more detailed. Obviously the charaters outside but where? Where is the dripping coming from? What is it, rain, snow? I really wan to know what the heck is dripping on the character's head. Hope this helps. Keep it up! Simles and smiles!

-Max

I won't say this was nice, but I thought it was good. I'd change "runny" in the third line, as you've already used it and I don't think this is long enough to warrant repetition. You handled the format well, and I really liked "first frost", actually. It sounded very melodic, and I liked the sense of change, which natuarlly goes hand in hand with your title.