It's good writing, I must say. But all the swares and insults to religion are driving off a lot of people who might want to read your story. If your okay with that, fine. But I must say, if the other parts are like this, I don't think I'd want to read them.
"Son, what do you want to be when you grow up?"
"A felon!"
"Are you sure?"
"Yah! This kid at school says they get all the girls!"
"I should try that..."
The thing about NaNo is that it is meant to be started and completed in the month of November, and editing comes in December. It doesn't seem fair to submit something you've already started, and its even mentioned in the rules.
[while trapped in a bucket of popcorn] You know what the worst part is? It's not even butter. We're gonna be destroyed by... ARTIFICIAL FLAVORING! — Blake Bradley, Power Rangers Ninja Storm
