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My brother and I wrote this on impulse. I was messing around on my violin and he was messing around on his guitar and mandolin, and we started playing it. Then I started singing random words...lol yeah, it's scary that these are the words that first came into my head, huh?

Anyway, here it is. It's a sort of latin, chunky, upbeat melody, similar to the children's song: "Down on the Banks of the Hanky-panky where the bull-frog jumps from bank to banky" etc. So yeah.


That guy is looking for a chicky chicky
and he's not gonna be too picky picky
'cause he's got hair growing out of his nose
and a stench that follows him wherever he goes.

The clock on the shelf goes ticky-tocky
and he's wishing that he had a walky-talky
'cause he doesn't have her cell phone number
and so he cannot call her

What can I say? Anyway, you're supposed to sing it wiht a sort of Spanish accent, like 'That guy eez luking for a cheeck-ee cheeck-ee"

It seems short, but there's a long instrumental section after that.
Last edited by sokool15 on Fri Aug 10, 2007 1:39 am, edited 1 time in total.
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He he... You're funny. You made this up on the spot? You're good... And funny... I suck at criting.

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LOL! This is funny. :D

The only thing I might suggest is changing "walky-tocky" to "wicky-talking." But I'm weird like that. :P

Anyway, cool stuff.
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So funny. I enjoyed it. The ending didn't really match to me but I cant really hear the music in my head.
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Nice! Very funny!
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Haha wow this is pretty funny XD

You made this up on the spot? Well done (:

The last line didn't fit but I mean that in kind of a good way (:

Well done

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