You shouldn't judge a book by it's cover, instead, you should read every single book to see what every book is about before you even come close to judging its viability.
For a first draft it's pretty good but the final is certainly much better. You made some nice improvements and it's interesting to see how you advanced this image.
I went to confront noisy neighbours, only to find the windows dark, stuck with two notes. The ghost, too, had "gone fishing". Something still whistled. — Liminality
