Home is where I stand

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It left me hanging,
Backwards I rode
Two on the tracks
Smashing free, I'm alone.

Said you would see me
on a warm summer's day.
You know you had me slipping
Not here, but farther away.

People knew more,
and had their alibies.
I didn't think much
of all the lies passing me by.

I knew you were changing,
But I couldn't let go.
I broke your promise
and I flew home for me.

CHORUS

Home's where I stay
Home's where my heart belonged.
Home's where my ache was,
Home never did me wrong.

I knew you wouldn't like it,
But Home is where I'll stay
I thought alot about it,
Bottling up my broken heart....
At the end of a day.

END CHORUS

We were catching the moon,
shooting down stars,
hating the sun
we were who we are.

I'll see you
on a warm summer's day
You'll find me
cause home I'll stay.

We tripped over brandy,
we sat on your steps,
Raising the roof up,
And bending our senses.

I knew you had left me,
when the robins stopped their song,
An eerie type of quiet,
I knew it was called alone.

CHORUS
Last edited by moosiegirl on Sat Jan 31, 2009 2:28 pm, edited 2 times in total.
"I don't know what to say, so I'll just say what's in my heart... Baboom, Baboom, Baboom."
--Mel Brooks




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Is this a song? I think that there is a lyric part of this website but I don't know I am new. The words are good. If it was a song I would probably listen to it :D
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It left me hanging
backwards I rode
two on the tracks
breaking free, I'm alone

Said you would see me
on a warm summer's day
You had me breaking
farther away

People knew more
and had alibies
I didn't think much
of all the lies passing by

I knew you were changing
I couldn't let go
I broke your promise
and I flew home

CHORUS

Home's where I stay
Home's where my heart belonged
Home's where my ache was
Home never did me wrong

I knew you like it
Home is where I'll stay
I thought about it
with a broken heart at the end of a day

END CHORUS

We were catching the moon
shooting down stars
hating the sun
we were who we are

I'll see you
on a warm summer's day
You'll find me
cause there I'll stay

When did it all go wrong
I'm over my head treading deep water
i thought you loved me
but now you've got her

I saw you through a window
I was lonely till you got here
I felt so happy
Then you had to disappear

CHORUS

Remember the good times
forget the rest
You know where to find me
'Cause you know me best

CHORUSx2

with a broken heart at the end of a day (FADE OUT)


Wow! I really liked hte first and last verses - they sounded absoloutly magical! The whole song was great and I think alot of people would listen to it if it was sung.

What you could have used to improve it though is punctaution - some lines start with capitials, others don't.

I also like how you kept it longer, but not too long, and also not boring.

Keep writing songs, I'd like to hear another. :)




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This was good, what genre would you place it in?
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probably a country song or some light pop
"I don't know what to say, so I'll just say what's in my heart... Baboom, Baboom, Baboom."
--Mel Brooks



If a story is in you, it has to come out.
— William Faulkner