Prosthesis #46 /P

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Incandescence
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Sun Apr 29, 2007 6:36 am
Incandescence says... · Sun Apr 29, 2007 6:36 am
Removed.
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M.B.Author
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Sun Apr 29, 2007 5:11 pm
M.B.Author says... · Sun Apr 29, 2007 5:11 pm
Hey,

Good and all, but "She giggled as the two show invisble darts back and forth." What is that sopposed to meen?

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Sun Apr 29, 2007 10:53 pm
Riedawriter23 says... · Sun Apr 29, 2007 10:53 pm
Two flashbacks in a row! This one was great XD. Kyle fell ontop of Jon, how clumsy. Did he do that on purpose or was it really an accident? lol. And of course Ariel had a video camera ;) I love Kyle's perspectives of Jon when he was younger. It almost seemed like he knew that he loved him but wasn't ready to accept it, just like any ordinary relationship...but you can see the conflict slowly creeping up. Off to read the next! Great job on this! :)

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Wed May 23, 2007 9:22 pm
Emerson says... · Wed May 23, 2007 9:22 pm
Oh...wow. I really loved this flash back.

It explains a lot about kyle, and why he acts like he does with Jon *cry* and why they can never be together, though I will always want them to be together....

(They need to sleep together!)
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