This...was....the...best....Pro....EVER! You made a Kyle/Jon kiss last like forever. I totally love you. Even though tis not Kyle... it's not Kyle right? That would be upsetting Lol. Kyle would love him though so not too upsetting. *thinks*
Anyways, this was great! I loved every moment of it.
Can't wait for more!
~Rieda
I love, love.
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In this chapter, the monster seems strangely reminiscent of Pennywise the clown in IT, by Stephen King.
"Jon felt the skin of his cheek parting beneath the blade like a piece of steak on someone’s dinner plate"
I thought that was slightly overdone. Otherwise, brilliant as usual.
Cameron
The individual leads in actual fact a double life, one in which he is an end to himself and another in which he is a link in a chain which he serves against his will or at least independently of his will.
--SIGMUND FREUD
Wow... incredibly violent, psychotic, and twisted.
You have such a skill for writing, really. The whole entire time I am going through exactly what Jon is going through, but in my own separate way, as the reader and not as Jon. In short, you rock.
“It's necessary to have wished for death in order to know how good it is to live.” ― Alexandre Dumas, The Count of Monte Cristo
The steak similie seemed out of place. I know you could think of a better one. So kindly do so.
The good parts of a book may be only something a writer is lucky enough to overhear or it may be the wreck of his whole damn life — and one is as good as the other.
Ernest Hemingway
