This was great, I think the most descriptive out of all the Pros with the camera.
We've all seen it. It's watched all of us at one point or another. It is the hand just above the back of your neck; the shadow at the end of the hall that watches you glance over your shoulder. It is the ruffle of papers, the listless whispering you hear before you fall asleep. It is the tension in your jaw, the pain in your head.
**This gave me the heeby jeebies. Lol, I was looking over my shoulder when I read this. And I loved the theme music!
~Rieda
I love, love.
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I adore these scenes. And this chapter is the most shocking of them. That voice that spoke now speaks to us, and mentions Jon, and--Aliens? I don't know what to think.
I'm excited. The more and more I read, the more I know this will be published. There isn't a way it won't. If this is your rough draft, I'm sure the final is beautiful. I caught some errors, but what is the point in saying so? :-p
I can feel its spindly fingers looping around my stomach and clenching upwards, forcing me to purge my insides
I love how vivid that is. Beautiful.
“It's necessary to have wished for death in order to know how good it is to live.” ― Alexandre Dumas, The Count of Monte Cristo
