Nightmare

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I can't stay sober anymore
There's just no use in crying
Endless tears and bringing up your name
Because I know that there's more to me than you
There's so much more that I could be without you
So let me go now

Don't try to save me I don't want to be saved
From this nightmare that I'm having now
I don't want to shake it, no
I don't want to lose the pain I don't want to
Feel empty knowing that I'm emotionless
I don't want to stay here with you

Crying tears of shame and sorrow
Crimson red innocence it fills my eyes and
As I watch the blood puddling at the surface
Under my skin falling to the ground
I know what I've done, but it's not something I regret

You make me feel as if I am worthless
Like I can do no right everything I do is wrong
So what can I do to make you see me
In a different light than what you already do
I can't hide my pain and I wont hide my insecurities
All that I am is who I will always be
And that's my choice, that's what I choose to do with my life
I wont be burdened anymore by your blissful lies
Your insulting ways of breaking me down
And making me feel like I'm nothing
I'm nothing to you

Don't try to hide me from the world because
I don't want to hide from anyone I don't want
To have to keep all these feelings a secret from
You anymore but I try so hard
'Cause if I lost you I'd be nothing more than a girl
Broken, confused, wanting just to die already
Don't try to save me I don't want to be saved from this nightmare that I'm having
Don't try to break through the walls surrounding my heart
They're there for a reason and you may never know why
But without these painful memories of the past
The present day in which I live with you at my side to
Haunt me at night in my dreams I see you
As you beat me again

You find different ways every time you're never the same
Not like you were before when we first met
You were sweet and sincere what happened to you
How can you be so violent I've done nothing to you
Nothing to cause you to hate me like you do
I'm not trying to change you, I never wanted that
But suddenly that's all that seemed to happen
Why do I put myself through this hellish nightmare
I'm living a horrible dream, but I don't want to shake it
I don't want to lose the pain
What doesn't kill me will only make me stronger, wisdom comes with age and with wisdom comes great responsiblity and maturity.




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Hello and welcome t o YWS, first of all! :D

I've been reading a lot of freestyle poetry lately, so this poem is pretty awesome to me. I like the ranty style, I like how it s just a flow of words and how it continues on and on... yeah.

One thing I would suggest is to check the grammar. You're missing a couple of apostrophes in there, and we love apostrophes. :) Also, proper punctuation would be lovely. But all in all, I love the ranty style.
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