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This is just a poem I made up, so don't ban me from this forum.

don't you cough or i'll say p*** off
Don't call me thick or i'll call you a p****
Don't be a s*** or i'll call you a bitch!

don't ban me, cos this is just a poem




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I don't know if it's a poem really.... If it is though it's very angry.




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Yea, I have to agree...I'm not entirely sure I'd call this is poem.

Foul language is actually acceptable in poetry, even on this forum. It needs to be given a proper rating and I believe that the foul language needs to fit into the piece....here I think you might be trying to model the piece around the language and to me that is not good.

Also, I must ask that you plz uz propr englsh whn typn and proper punctuation in your piece because if you don't then it becomes one long drawn out sentence that one must say aloud in one breath and it will cause a string of suffocation deaths due to lack of air to these readers who are simply innocent passerbyers and then you will get sued for murder and will get thrown in jail for years until you are old and bitter and you repeat this particular poem over and over again in your cell until you finally die of suffocation yourself from your one long runon piece of literature. Thanks.
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This didn't seem serious.

Some reasons:

1. It was one sentence

2. Half of it was comprised of ***

3. It was not appropriate for children ages 2-5, but much too easy for anyone older than that.

:?
All the world's a stage,
And all the men and women merely players.

~William Shakespeare




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umm...
Myth-ology, I think you need to see a psychiatrist.

1. This isn't a poem
2. Why are you swearing?
3. It is rubbish even if it is a poem



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