Dream realm

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Here dreams lie forgotten.
Inner most yearnings pushed aside.
Lie here until awakened.
Hope for Peace




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Is it a haiku? I couldn't offer you any crit on it. I'm not much of a haiku person and because it's all so short and theres all sorts of hidden meaning I wouldn't be able to suggest anything so...

I like it, nice word choice, interesting subject, ends well. About all I can say.
Sing we for joy and idleness,
Naught else is worth the having. -- Ezra Pound

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"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites