That was Amazing! Honestly I didn't know that past was there. I didn't know that Jon and Kyle were together that makes me think back at how much more interesting that makes every part they were together. And Ariel with Kyle and Jon started that early? That's perfect. All of the personalities were there with that perfect twist of immaturity, that was very well done. And Kyle is a little player as always, very nice. I also liked that new word you invented there, Kyleosexual, brilliant. That is one hot word. lol. I'm loving your characters, your plots, I'm attached as you might have noticed. hehe.
Keep it up!
-Rieda
I love, love.
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*dies* You know how much I've been waiting to see some Kyle and Jon action! Woo! I got my fill!
Though at the whole Jon-Kyle-Asher-Ariel scene when they were, I suppose, outside the house or something? I got horribly confused. I couldn't really understand what was going on. Ariel was there....but wasn't there. At least thats what I could get.
I love the conflict. Jon loves kyle! I assume he's jealous because of kyle not Ariel. Thats so cute. ha ha ha. You keep working amazing things.
I'm a Kyleosexual, I have to admit. Can I join the group?
“It's necessary to have wished for death in order to know how good it is to live.” ― Alexandre Dumas, The Count of Monte Cristo
