Sleepy Puppy Waking Up

A pool of invisible fire
glowing embers of
soft sleepy fur
curly and fuzzy and wrinkled and small,
oh so small.
A tail that doesn't quite touch
a wet button black nose
the gentle rise and fall
of the fluff on his back.
Little teeth, like pearls lining an
itsy pink tongue
poking out from dark lips,
lips that in another would
speak of evil,
but in this puppy face,
they only bring out his eyes.

OK. I like this poem. There are a few things I would change.

curly and fuzzy and wrinkled and small,
oh so small.

I would take out the

oh so small.

or make it longer. It just sticks out to me and doesn't fit in. I think that's about it... otherwise well done. You have written something I have been trying to write for a while!

thanks! yeah, i think i agree, now that i look at it that line does kind of stand out. thanks, that was really helpful!