Shadow Dance (my poem) please review!

Hello, I'm firefaery, and I just joined. I would like feedback on my poem, Shadow Dance, posted in the Dramatic Poetry poem. It is one of my better works. Its kinda long, has rythm, and is rather dark. Please take a peek and let me know what you think! Honesty is appreciated!
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