The Mage Chronicles Book One: Blood War

Title: Mage Chronicles Book One: Blood War

Genre: Fantasy/Romance

Synopsis: When Ryder Sullivan gains a powerful Mentor his mother, Head of the Eternal Order, decides to declare war on her son and his Mentor. As the war goes on, Ryder and his mentor Styxx find themselves falling in love with one another. Can their love survive a war? Or are they doomed to fail?

I'll try to take a look! I don't read a lot of fantasy but I love romance

What exactly are you looking for? Would you like big picture edits like thoughts on the plot arc and character arcs and how the story works as a big whole? Would you like medium level edits like general thoughts after each chapter and how I think the chapters work as individual units? Or would you like micro edits like line-by-line nit-picks?

Micro edits would be nice because I kind of suck at editing things myself. And thank you! That would be awesome!

Sounds good! It'll take me a little while, but I'll get on it as soon as I can

Thank you!

I did the first chapter. Look that over and let me know if my style and critiques work for you. If so, I'll keep on going

That works! I like the way you critiqued it. Thanks! Can't wait for more.

LOOK WHAT I FINALLY FINISHED


I did track changes and added comments on the side. There are also a big overview of my thoughts at the end. Please PM me with any questions/comments/concerns

Oh my Goodness! Thank you so much! (I've been really busy otherwise I would have seen this a LOT sooner, obviously.)

You're very welcome! Good luck with the edits and let me know if you need anything else!