Hey! I can take a look for you! I don't read a lot of urban fantasy, but I love YA
What I like to do is read the whole thing once as a reader and give my thoughts at the end (big picture things like plot, characterization, execution, what I thought worked/didn't, etc.) Then I go back through and give more specific feedback for each chapter. I'm very honest, but I'm also very positive - so I'll tell you what I think you're doing well and what I like, but I don't shy away from constructive feedback
I'm looking over another novel in this manner right now, so as soon as I'm done with that one, I can get started on yours if my critique style sounds like something you're interested in!
It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.
