Can a maypole dream?

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The Maypole stands
In the deserted field
Of a ruined school

A tree stands beside
Gnarled branches lifted
Black from soot and ash

The maypole’s paint
Is cracked down
And faded

The ribbons
Have gone save four
Lost to the wind

Yet it stands tall
Left behind
Waiting for a dance

A dance by children long gone
A dance with ribbons long lost
A dance to celebrate a day that never came

The maypole stands
Alone save for the breeze
And the dying tree

Yet something is stirring
The broken gate opens
And a girl runs in

She runs up to the school
And in the ruined door
As the maypole watches

Then she runs out
Her eyes sweep the empty field
And rest on the maypole

She runs up to it
And touches its cracked paint
And grips the faded ribbon

And she dances
Round and round
A dance to celebrate nothing

Then when she is tired
She curls up beside the maypole
And sleeps beside it

The maypole stands guard through the night
Then like a sentinel
Brings in the day

The girl wakes slowly
Pulls herself up
And takes the ribbon

Then she dances again
Skipping around
Hair flying in the breeze

Suddenly she hears something
And cocks her head to listen
She hugs the maypole

Then she’s running off
To the broken gate
Without a backward glance

And the maypole is alone
In the empty field
Of the ruined school

And slowly
Weakened by the movement
The child’s ribbon frays

The ribbon breaks at the top
Leaving no trace it ever existed
Leaving no trace of the girl

The maypole is alone
And there is no evidence of the child
Maybe it never happened

Do maypoles have dreams?
Do they dream of children dancing?
And sleeping beneath their peeling paint?

Yet maybe it did happen
For caught on a tree
In the next field

There’s a grey ribbon
Its colour long faded
Caught on a branch

It waits for someone to take it
But no one comes
For there’s no one there
There’s no one anywhere.
If love at first sight is tacky
Is love at second true?
Do I need a third, a fourth, a fifth
To Fall in Love with you?
-Voyager, TBC




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Beautiful. Just a tad long, but really quite beautiful.

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I got a bit carried away. i think because of the line length it's not actually that much longer than a normal poem but I haven't checked that.
If love at first sight is tacky
Is love at second true?
Do I need a third, a fourth, a fifth
To Fall in Love with you?
-Voyager, TBC




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I would probably write this:

A dance by children long gone
A dance with ribbons long lost
A dance to celebrate a day that never came


As this:

A dance by children long gone
With ribbons long lost
To celebrate the day that never came


Something like that. You can play with it. ^_^

Otherwise, it is a perfectly charming poem. ^_^
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I think due to the short line lengths, the poem did not feel too long whilst reading it, in my opinion. I thought this was a lovely poem.
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If it weren't for the affecting intensity of the short lines and stanzas, I'd say the words were too simple. As it is, they fit rather nicely. Enjoyed your poem, because it was so different. My only advice is to perhaps rework a few sentences around the middle, just one or two, and just enough so keep the reader engaged until the end.
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I almost cried. I hate emotion. *attacks all emotion in the world* MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *is :twisted: and slightly hyper @ the moment*
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That was really good. It was actually touching, something I haven't felt for a while. Keep writing.



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