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Poetriez
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:41 pm
Poetriez says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:41 pm
the worlds a pool of wonder,
as you look fourth and yonder
you see a star of hope,
and that is how we cope.
Last edited by Poetriez on Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:02 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Shine
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Sat Apr 01, 2006 9:49 am
Shine says... · Sat Apr 01, 2006 9:49 am
LoL u've got Nate's avatar.

the poem is short and sweet.(infact very short)

The rhyming is good. :)
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Angel17
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Sat Apr 01, 2006 4:09 pm
Angel17 says... · Sat Apr 01, 2006 4:09 pm
coupe
Should be cope?

A Nice short poem, with a nice rhyme scheme.
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

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xanthan gum
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Sat Apr 01, 2006 8:55 pm
xanthan gum says... · Sat Apr 01, 2006 8:55 pm
Expand on this. It's too short to provide a proper critique to this - each line is also sort of disjointed from the next.

coupe

cope

start using punctuation. please =/
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Poetriez
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Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:03 am
Poetriez says... · Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:03 am
yeah i didn't notice i wrote coupe which is also a word ha ha an yeah i could probably expand it i put in punctuation
War is war
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