Red Light, Blue Light

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Ptolemy is my lover,
Roy G Biv stole my virginity.
Strike me with your gamma rays-
Whisper something revolutionary.




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All of your pieces are overwhelmingly short. They might be worthwhile if you actually took them and did something with them before posting them. This starts, and then it ends. Poems are no different from prose in that there should always be a beginning a middle and an end. You have none of these. I understand you're humor, but I think you should work more on developing something rather than just spating these short little bits out.
Beware of the scary banana fingers! For they are mushy, and yellow.

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This was beautiful as it is, but I must agree - if only you would write more.

The color of ROY G BIV hurt my eyes. just saying hha...
Carpe Diem.



You unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension: a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You’re moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You’ve just crossed over into… the Twilight Zone.
— Rod Serling