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They look into my eyes,
But they don’t understand why I lie,
The twisted sea swirling inside of me,
How I wished they understood me.

Been to so many therapists now,
They all say the same,
Locked in my room white padded walls surround me,
Mirrors for them to watch and laugh at me.

No peace, no silence
The voices in my head demanding me to kill,
Hands strapped tightly behind my back,
I Just want to be normal.

Why am I like this what’ve I done wrong?
Why do I see it all so clearly?
I’m not insane I just understand the truth,
Can’t they see they are insane?

I haven’t got long,
My names written off as a lost course,
No space for me in this world,
I’m not insane, I’m not…


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Sorry I post to many lyric poemey things - last one I promise!!! Would really appreiacte your thoughts on it.
Last edited by Wulie on Fri Jan 28, 2005 7:56 pm, edited 1 time in total.
'Sadistic lies we form like the web of a spider, the truth we hide like our flaws.'




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This is good. I would say to change something but I see nothing to change. Very good.




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Wulie wrote:My names written off as a lost course


ummm... think u mean cause, not course...




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This is very cool. Haunting and original. I love it!
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I completely LOVED this poem...all the things about 'I'm not insane, I just understand the truth...oh my god I loved that line. My only critique would be that you kind of blend some lines and sentences together, when you really shouldn't. It sounds kind of choppy when you read it...if you want me to pinpoint them I will but I think you could find them just by reading the poem over. :D this was awesome!
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This was pretty good, but again, like I said on your [war] poem, it didn't flow very well. You need to concentrate on certian aspects, and don't try to fit so much into one stanza. But I did like the last line, and it was a good topic to be written in first person.
"Meanwhile everyone wants to breathe and nobody can; and many say, 'We will breathe later.' And most of them don’t die because they are already dead." -- Graffiti of the events of May, Paris '68



More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
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