Like almost everybody else said: WOW! This is really good. It's a fast paced poem and it's pretty deep too. This must mean you look at life from a pretty depressing view but, In a way that's how the world is getting nowdays.
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That awkward moment when you jump out a window because your friend jumped out a window, then you remember that your other friend can fly. — Rick Riordan, The Ship of the Dead
i like how you used short sentences..and the poem speaks for itself
