'A fire that keeps my warm' - 'my' should be 'me'.
As a literary work this is very original. Most works about mental health are a confusing monologue that nobody can relate to unless they share the illness and if they share the illness it's probably not a good idea for them to be reading it anyway. What you have done here is remind people that depression affects not only the afflicted person but also the people around them. As a 'person around them' myself, I am very grateful for this.
I think, if I was depressed, I would take offence to the fact that he wanted a 'happy' girl. It seems ignorant of him to think that being depressed is something to criticised. He might as well say 'I don't want an unwell girl. I want a healthy one. This one's broken.' And I'm sure that's not what you were going for.
I like your characterisation as it reminds me very much of a depressed friend of mine.
If this is autobiographical at all, feel free to contact me if you ever want to talk, although I guess you have Ethan for that.
Well done. (normally I put a smiley here but that makes no sense here)
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