*This story is underneath my folder titled “What happened to Ellette + Vaughn?”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33”. Enjoy!*
“Have you ever tried to free yourself?” Ellette asked.
Vaughn sighed, his voice haggard and broken. Over time, they had spoken to each other. They had grown to be friends, and then something more. The only problem was that they couldn’t kiss, for Vaughn was a good sixteen foot taller than Ellette.
His teeth breaking into her flesh, gorging through her skin, still haunted her memory, but she had grown to feel sorry for him. He was only lonely, he only wanted someone to keep him company.
“I can’t. Axira cursed me, remember? It was an accident, but it’s still unbreakable. I’m trapped like this.” Vaughn said.
“Maybe try your best to focus on the good things. Maybe then we’ll both be free.” Ellette said.
Vaughn smiled at her with bloody teeth, as though he thought that her words were sweet, but didn’t quite believe them.
The cave they were in reeked of dead animals, the victims of Vaughn’s teeth. Upon thinking of victims, Ellette thought of Beckham, her little brother who had seen her get eaten.
I’m so sorry you had to see that, Beckham. I hope that I can extend my love towards you. Ellette thought.
She and Vaughn both closed their eyes. They thought of finally being released, of being let go into Heaven, of holding each other.
Soon, she felt Vaughn’s arms around her. She felt him kiss the top of her head, and opened her bloodied eyes.
He was a human, albeit a tad taller than her, but a human, no less.
Angel wings grew from their backs, spreading to bring them high into the Heavenly garden above.
“We’re free.” Vaughn said with a smile.
Ellette focused on bringing the rose-lavender energy to Beckham, so that he would know not to worry.
They were free at last.
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Hello, there! Avi speaking
Despite not reading your work on Ellette and Vaughn's story prior to this one, I understood what was happening since you gave such good context and backstory, which is a feat most writers forget to do, so kudos for that!
"The only problem was that they couldn’t kiss, for Vaughn was a good sixteen foot taller than Ellette." I'd replace "a good sixteen foot" with "a good sixteen feet" because of pluralization. This was also a bit of comedic relief in a generally dark piece (i.e. bl00d, e@ting people, being trapped).
"I’m so sorry you had to see that, Beckham. I hope that I can extend my love towards you. Ellette thought." "Ellette focused on bringing the rose-lavender energy to Beckham, so that he would know not to worry." I was a bit confused by this, but I think it means she hopes she can send waves of her peace toward him so he knows she's at peace and she's safe?
All in all, this is a great story with a great plot, and I look forward to seeing more of this universe
Hi vampricone. Happy Review Day! Valkyria here to leave a quick review about your work. Let's get into it:
I skimmed through your previous works about Ellette and Vaughn to get some context about these characters and world, but I could follow along in this story without being confused at all. You give enough background that is sprinkled throughout this work so first time readers (including myself) wouldn't be confused about what had happened previously.
The relationship between Ellette and Vaughn is really sweet and sad, knowing about their situation. But I love that they found a happy ending. I think you can expand this story and really delve into how they both became free. There is a lot of room for the characters to do soul searching, and you can expand on the guilt Ellette feels for her brother seeing her get eaten. Maybe that redemption or acceptance is what earns them a place in Heaven.
Overall, wonderful job on your story! I enjoyed it very much.
I%u2019m glad you did!