Hi! Manilla here for a review. (I listened to the song, and it's gorgeous!!) Let's get right into it, shall we?
I have zero nitpicks on the flow or word choice, partially because it's a lyrical piece and partially because it's just, well, well-written and good. One comment is that you placed rhymes in some places, but didn't in others, like the first two lines in the last stanza. I wonder why you did this. The middle stanza's lines are shorter compared to the others, and this could be personal thing, but would it fit better at the end?
I love the dreamy, ethereal vibe you produce, with words like "stars" and "happenstance". Please write more songs like this - The lyrics may be simple, but the music takes it to another level.
That's all from me!
-Manilla out
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